My Journey With Albert

I’ve talked a lot about the fact that I have been a serious fiction writer for a long time, sixteen years to be exact.  My graduate creative program was structured so that you couldn’t concentrate in two genres, so I concentrated in poetry, but over the years after grad school, I collected fiction pubs here and there. I still didn’t have any confidence about my fiction, though, so I decided to take a workshop.

The fiction workshop was with an organization that I will not name. I won’t identify the year or the teacher, either; I only will say I admired the teacher so much because he was a well-known Black fiction writer, though I hadn’t yet read his work. However, when I entered the workshop, the teacher had a very gruff, nearly rude manner toward me, even though I was putting the full beam of my Southern Belle charm on him.

Y’all that charm is dangerous, especially when combined with my mother’s biscuits, but I didn’t make him the biscuits. Maybe that was my problem.

Strangely, though, the teacher was friendly to the other students, just not to me— it seemed that way. But sometimes, I’m very overly sensitive, so I thought it was just in my head. He and I were nearly of the same generation, while the other students were much younger than I was, and since I was an accomplished poet with two books, I wondered if I was giving off some “know-it-all” impression without wanting to. I knew my having poetry books meant nothing in the fiction world, so arrogance wasn’t going to get me anywhere.

Finally, it came time to workshop my story. Weeks before the workshop began, I had sent in a twenty-page story called “Fish Albert,” about an old man who wants to be independent and take care of himself, but whose daughter is starting to take his independence away from him, bit by bit.

Both Albert and his daughter are Black, and they live in the deep country, in a (fictitious) small town in Georgia called Chicasetta. The old man speaks in deep vernacular and is uneducated, while his daughter is a college graduate who speaks very correct English with a clipped accent. There were parts of this story that I knew had serious issues, but to me, those issues were plot-based. I had a habit of writing  long passages of beautiful language that didn’t go anywhere, and I knew I needed help with that. But I didn’t have any problem with the setting and the dialogue–I thought.

When it came time for workshop, though, the teacher didn’t talk about the plot at all; instead, he focused almost solely on the language the old man used, meaning the Black vernacular. My teacher told me the story was “riddled with racial cliché” and he went on to say how “offensive” the character of the old man was, how people like this “didn’t really exist.” (Clearly, my teacher had never met any of my great-uncles.)  When I asked him—in my humblest, most quiet, and frankly, my most unlike-Honorée manner—how to fix the story, he suggested cutting eighteen pages out of it. Which would have left, like, two pages. To me, it seemed–again seemed--like he was saying “throw this story in the trash can.”

As I sat there and my teacher talked about my writing in a strident tone and with his face screwed up like he was smelling a fresh outhouse, I started getting the impression that he was taking something about my story personally, but I didn’t know what. I immediately tried to dismiss that notion, because I’ve had my own students say, “she didn’t like me” on teaching evaluations.

I decided to set the story aside. Clearly it was bad and couldn’t be fixed.

Then, a while later, I decided to order a book by that teacher from Amazon. I couldn’t even make it through the book, I was so bored. So I started reading another book by him—same experience. The novels were very smart and funny and had extremely intellectual frameworks, but I felt no emotional connection to the stories or the characters. Admittedly, I’m prejudiced that way; I like a lot of feeling in my books, not just irony and humor.

I like a lot of feeling in my life, too, by the way.

Then, I got to thinking–or “cogitating,” as Albert might say. Maybe the problem between my teacher and me had been our own artistic prejudices. He liked smart stories and didn’t care whether anyone was feeling something inside when reading his work while I liked emotional stories and didn’t care about the intellectual impression I was leaving.

But just because I don’t have an intellectual concept when I sit down to write doesn’t mean I’m not smart. Like the main character in my story, I have a southern drawl and speak (sometimes) in the vernacular, but that doesn’t mean I’m stupid. And it also doesn’t mean I can’t write a smart story, either—smart doesn’t always have to look and act one way. We Black folks have to stop making that mistake about each other.

That’s when I went to my files and found the “Fish Albert” story. At that point, the story was five years old.

I changed the title of the story to “A Cheerful Tune” and submitted it to Shenandoah: The Washington and Lee University Review. It was accepted and published. Now, in my teacher’s defense, I did revise that story, a lot. But I also kept the basic plot and the Black vernacular dialogue that he really, really despised.

A few days ago, I received a letter from the editor of Shenandoah informing me that I had won the Goodheart Award in Fiction, and the prize comes with money, too! And I really liked the name of that award. The name says something to me—and not just that 1) I’m about to get paid and 2) my former teacher can suck it–and he can suck my traditional southern African American folkways and vernacular.

No, “Goodheart” reminds me to look back and see how far I’ve come and not to get down on myself if I’m not moving as far ahead as I think I should. Surely, I want to make money on my creative writing, but I’ll never be super-rich, and probably not even moderately rich. The most I can hope for is to pay off my student loans. But I write because it gives me happiness inside and a purpose in life.

So let me say this.

I know a lot of y’all out there feel like me and I want to encourage y’all to stay the course on your good journey, whatever it be. Don’t you let nobody stop your flow. And don’t you let nobody turn you round or steal your joy. You got the victory inside you. Remember that.

And that’s me and my Black vernacular talking to you. Okay?

9 thoughts on “My Journey With Albert

  1. Congratulations on this award, Honorée. I also must say that one need not oppose “smart” and the “vernacular,” or work animated by ideas vs. fiction written by and set in the Black South, etc. I mean, we have had many generations of folks writing great work in this vein….

    • I completely agree with you, John!–I realize I should have made that clear in the post. As you say, there are a lot of fiction writers working in the vernacular (or using elements of the vernacular) who are super-smart and who work with ideas. Toni Morrison is the absolute master of this combination, I think–though her work isn’t set in the South–but there are several brilliant others, like Zora Neale Hurston (of course) and most recently, Edward P. Jones.

  2. Thank you for sharing Miss Honoree. I think over the years we have all had teachers that for some reason we felt they didn’t like us. Nothing in particular that we did, there was just that feeling that hung around for a semester or an entire year. My husband had that in pharmacy school, of course I would not recommend what he called the teacher, a Nazi, and then my husband quit…..this was a long time ago.

    Maybe you have answered our questions as to why sometimes a student and teacher don’t get along, or maybe there is not an answer for everyone.

  3. Congratulations on that award, which you so deserve. I had almost the same dang thing happen to me in grad school — talking about a poem where the word “ought” was used. I said it could mean “should” or “zero.” The Esteemed Professor of Modernism said no one used it to mean “zero.” I said my Granny from the Appalachians called James Bond “Double Ought Zero.” He said that was “foolish” and laughed. He can suck it too. I may send him all my books now and tell him so — numbering this among the reasons I don’t give to the alumni fund. xo, Julie

    • Julie:

      I thought everyone knew that about “ought”! What is going on here? You know, after reading your comment I think I am understanding finally that to a person who didn’t grow up Down South, our whole vocabulary seems like a foreign language. I can’t tell you how many times I get asked to repeat myself on a daily basis.

      When you win a big award for your Mary Turner book that is coming out this summer, you MUST send your former professor a signed copy. Inscribe it, “Dear Professor, you can suck my Double Ought You-Know-What.”:-)


  4. Congratulations on your Goodheart, Honorée, and thanks for the closing words of encouragement. They couldn’t have come at a better time for me since I just got my first bad book review (pretty nasty, actually) on Amazon, some stranger but the gratuitously harsh lashing of those seven years of my life still hurts. Your entry also made me think of the teacher who told me, when I was perhaps 10, that poetry shouldn’t rhyme–which since all of mine seemed to come out that way made me not write another line for another ten years or so. Now, “I’m a dart in the heart of the art I don’t start,” and damn proud of it. Best, David

  5. Congrats Honorée. It’s those literary moments that make writing so sweet. And why having a writing community is important. One person’s opinion is just that, one person’s opinion. Can’t wait to read the piece.

  6. Professor Jeffers never have I heard such clear words. I understand you as if we were twins; furthermore, I will contiue my craft. I have been working on a story for years and hope one day to finish it. I have vision loss but went back to school after forty years and find it amazing. i am taking AML 4624 and have had creative writing classes also. Thank you for me recovery of identity.

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